When talking about the "recent break-in", Nelvel says, "It seems that when they were moving one of the more heavier Dwemer apparatuses our criminal masterminds accidentally dropped it." The phrase "More heavier" should be fixed, and there should be a comma after apparatuses.
Also, he later says, "500 septims take it or leave it." Another comma should be after the "septims" here.
There are a few other similar mistakes (a comma too many or too few, double spaces where they shouldn't be, etc.).