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q3-11-Mis

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Claim type: Quest
Claim ID: TR_q3-11-Mis (#2718)
Faction: Misc
Parent claim: TR_3-6-Ind (#110)
Claimed by: Tondollari
Status: Approved (Progress: 100%)
Location: 1:(4285, -2784):0
Files: TR_q3-11-Mis_Tondollari_1.esp

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From Tondollari:

Simple quest for vampire players.

In the Lan Orethan region, there is an ancient Dunmer stronghold "Merihayan" with a vampire in the basement. There is a tiny Indoril outpost "Lan Orethan Outpost" nearby (staffed by two).

If the player is a vampire of any clan, they will be able to talk to the vampire in Merihayan. He is very worried that the outpost's Indoril are out to get him. Over the past few weeks, he says, they have been visiting the stronghold and progressing deeper and deeper into it. With the vampire's paranoid state of mind, it should be ambiguous whether or not this is actually happening.

The vampire tasks the player with slaughtering the two Indoril. When the player returns with news of their deaths, the vampire will give them a dagger with a bound dagger enchantment (demon dagger?).
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Post by Tondollari »

Claim. Reward may be different, since the demon tanto already has a bound dagger enchantment.
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Done! Reward is potion.
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submitting to review
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Post by arvisrend »

- "Once I was an asset to my clan, foraging the countryside for fresh blood. Now I merely sit and wait." I don't like the word "asset" here. This is not a CEO speaking. What about "esperance"?

- Grammar: "There's an Indoril outpost is a short distance north of here..."

- Stage 15 "I killed the Indoril guards. Berelas should be pleased." shouldn't finish the quest.

- I suggest to replace "Okay, run along then." by "Run along then.".

Other than this, great work on this and q3-6!
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Post by Yeti »

Esperance? I've never heard of that word in my life, and would have no idea what the guy was talking about if I encountered him in game.
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Supposedly an antiquated word for "hope". It's from a thesaurus, of course, but it's the best I can do. Do you have any other ideas? "Rising star" sounds unfitting, if the metaphor exists in English at all.
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Post by Yeti »

Sorry, I guess I should add my own suggestions before criticizing yours. :D

breadwinner?

Wait, how about this:

"Once I was a my clan's most resourceful hunter, foraging the countryside for fresh blood. Now I merely sit and wait."
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Yes, I like this last suggestion.
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I would suggest "meat" or "game" rather than "blood", simply because you don't hunt for blood to survive typically.
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Post by sasquatch2o »

"Once I was my clan's most revered hunter, foraging amidst wilderness, tracking game. Now I merely sit and wait."
my opinion.
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Post by arvisrend »

Made my changes, using Yeti's wording (minus a grammar issue). This is the version to be merged into Mainland. There are no merge instructions.
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Post by arvisrend »

Merged into Mainland. Great work, Tondollari!
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